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Re: Under rewriting progress
Hello! Truth here for a review :D If you don't mind I'll start with some of my nitpicking and corrections. All of them are suggestions, after all, you are the ...
Jan 21, 2011 -
Re: Valuable [Prologue-revised]
Hello there :) Truth here for a review! Alright, first thought... this looks long. On with nitpicks, I'll correct and suggest as I go. Though her coworkers adored me, and ...
Jan 20, 2011 -
Re: Take A Chance- 8 (part two)
Here for a review? Suuuure. :) I quoted it for you. It's alright, you can say it, 'Thank you Truth! You're making my life so much easier'. Yeah, I know, ...
Jan 20, 2011 -
Re: The Cost of Love Chapter 2
Hello there :) Truth here to review! The next morning, Liz woke to a gentle massaging on her shoulders , comma “Mmmmm.” You mean, massage? “Good morning,” Jem whispered into ...
Jan 20, 2011 -
Re: Dark Wings- Chapter 1 - Temporary Title
Hey there :) Truth here to review! First off with corrections... There has to be a balance in the band ; There cannot be 17 flutes and 3 trumpets. A ...
Jan 19, 2011 -
Re: Red Ribbons
Red Ribbons She sees her , Soft white skin, The soft blue veins , That mark a way , Beneath her skin . In her pale white wrist, She feels ...
Jan 18, 2011 -
Re: I Am Not A Monster Afterall
Hello there :) Wow, this is intense, isn't? I love the emotion of this, it's so anguished and... almost freaky. I love the style, even if it's really choppy, and ...
Jan 18, 2011 -
Re: Patience chapter 2
Hey there :) I'm Truth, here for a review! I'm sorry, it might look very intimidating with all this red, but no worries, it's nothing too big. All of my ...
Jan 15, 2011 -
Re: Colors
Colors I went into the kitchen counter got myself another hour and gave half of it to you. Love this :) I sat there looking at the detail in the ...
Jan 13, 2011 -
Re: Was a mistake.
Eyes briefly meeting Hands sliding down my back My heart pulsing rapidly This angle of attack Lips touching abrasively Bodies demanding passion Words whispered with desire And meaningful passion With ...
Jan 13, 2011 -
Re: Fate - Chapter 1: Broken Glass
Hello! :) I'm Truth, nice to meet you! On with the review? I'll start with some nitpicks and corrections I suggest. Broken Glass Chapter 1 Broken glass is always an ...
Jan 12, 2011 -
Re: Balance - Chapter Two :: Cold
Hey there :) Truth here to review! I turned and looked at the man called Zain, confused by his refusal. Hadn't he wanted to be free? Hadn't he wanted to ...
Jan 11, 2011 -
Re: Take A Chance- 7 (part one)
Heyy Twinzy :) I'll do this fast, just to correct things and polish it all so it can be at its greatest! It was true however that he had been ...
Jan 10, 2011 -
Re: Unicorns VS Zombies
Hello there :) Truth here! Sorry I only got some nitpicks, I can't keep myself from correcting. Their numbers were low but they were sent to the zombie filled earth ...
Jan 9, 2011 -
Re: Chapter Four
NOTE: The format is terrible, I know, it YWS not me, I swear. Present Day “Anya! Nick! Breakfast!” I called outside. Nick was teaching Anya how to put spiral on ...
Jan 9, 2011
