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  • Short Story » General, Narrative Re: Don't Forget to Stamp Your Ticket

    Tue Feb 18, 2014 7:47 pm
  • Short Story » General, Narrative Re: Don't Forget to Stamp Your Ticket

    Mon Jan 27, 2014 1:07 am
  • Poetry » Romantic, Realistic Re: The White Canvas

    Simple, raw, yet cute and effective. The imagery is beautiful and the metaphorical aspect of it is very easy to grasp. It was an easily-digested poem, which I love. Simplicity ...

    Thu Jun 27, 2013 5:25 pm
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Green

    Well, well Pen. I'm starting to get the vibe that you and I just don't artistically connect, at all. You don't seem to realize where I'm coming from, what I ...

    Thu Feb 28, 2013 8:52 pm
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Green

    Sorry for the sloppy reply, but I'm very tired at the moment, I hope you can see past the spelling mistakes. Thanks for the review anyway, I really appreciate it!

    Thu Feb 28, 2013 8:50 pm
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Green

    To me, it's always been more important what the reader perceives of the text than my original intention. I write these little thing to move through some pain or make ...

    Thu Feb 28, 2013 8:45 pm
  • Poetry » Lyrical, Narrative Re: eMutation

    I appreciate the kind words, but when I wrote this I was in kind of a weird place, emotionally. I read it just now for the first time in almost ...

    Sun Feb 24, 2013 7:46 pm
  • Poetry » Narrative, Science Fiction Re: Sleepless Hours

    You're always so lovely to me! :)

    Tue Feb 19, 2013 11:40 pm
  • Poetry » Narrative, Science Fiction Re: Sleepless Hours

    Well, I got what I asked for, it seems. I'm the getting the vibe that you are just a tidbit biased when it comes to me, aren't you though, Pen?

    Mon Feb 18, 2013 5:17 pm
  • Poetry » Narrative, Science Fiction Re: Sleepless Hours

    Thorazine was a drug previously used to treat schizophrenia. And pharynx is a part of the throat. The point of the poem is more about conveying a feeling than making ...

    Sun Feb 17, 2013 3:18 am
  • Poetry » Narrative, Science Fiction Re: Sleepless Hours

    I didn't want to be too specific, but since the mentioning of factorial alarms, I always imagined the narrator to live next to some industrial part of town. So the ...

    Sat Feb 16, 2013 10:11 pm
  • Poetry » Narrative, Science Fiction Re: Sleepless Hours

    There is no punch-line, really. I just fell in love with the idea of a suicidal schizophrenic shut-in observing a futuristic fascism regime through a window; no hope, just order.

    Sat Feb 16, 2013 8:53 pm
  • Poetry » Narrative, Science Fiction Re: Sleepless Hours

    Holy crap, what the hell was I thinking? I mix dem English words up sometimes... Thorazine is old-school, which is why I picked it. I thought it went well together ...

    Sat Feb 16, 2013 8:52 pm
  • Poetry » Narrative, Lyrical Re: Disintegration

    Thank you! I'll think about it! :)

    Mon Jan 07, 2013 12:04 am
  • Poetry » Narrative, Lyrical Re: Disintegration

    Also, what makes you think the child is a baby? Obviously he/she is old enough to have intelligent thought.

    Sun Jan 06, 2013 12:52 pm


Revision is one of the exquisite pleasures of writing.
— Bernard Malamud