TheModernist

Shadowraiki is right about creating a french mood with a single phrase. The whole time I had a picture of the south of france in my head, but at the ...

You got it. I left high school early because I felt like I was losing my right to imagine. I didn't know this then of course, it just felt like ...

This was great. I love little poems like these. I have to say that I feel like punctuation wouldn't make much of a difference. The spacing and capitalization helps pace ...

That was a great piece of writing. It's personal and real and you know it when you read it. Regarding the first reply: keep the "you." This story is a ...

I love short fiction I like this and this was done pretty well: quick, clever and it had a point. You may want to tweak the dialogue a little bit ...

I really liked this one. It left me with a similar impression as your daisy poem which I also really liked, so good job with consistency. The structure really helps ...

This was good. It was short and simple. I think that it may benefit from some punctuation, however. The other thing I would suggest would be to change "move" to ...

I love short, concise, simple poems, but they have to be sharp either a rapier or a sledgehammer. Unfortunately, I didn't feel stabbed or pummeled. The first stanza is good, ...

First off, I'm just starting to play around with meter so I know it can be a challenge,but you did manage to achieve an admirable amount of rhythm with this ...

I agree with all the above posts which say that the poem is "choppy" and could benefit from a bit of punctuating, but I really like what you're trying to ...

First off, I like the theme. But the first stanza seemed a little estranged from the rest of the poem: "with a hunters weapons; bow and arrow. Mammouth skin and ...

This was really good. Normally i avoid poems on the longer side, but this one was gripping. For some reason it reminded me of something Johnny cash would have wrote. ...

I was a little confused myself, and I think I know why: my very first impression was that she was older, and that, in her younger years, she had been ...

This was cool, but vague, now vague is not bad, but this one may be a little too vague. There is a lot of room where you can place a ...

The message is really great. Isaac is right that the tone is neutral, as opposed to how emotional it could be, but I think it works. It's like this guy ...