TheEstimableEelz

I like it. Regardless, I think you could put some more work into the end-middle of the first stanza (after "very day;"). It's much less poetic in comparison to the ...

I can tell you, Payne. It is hard to come by because... okay, I don't really know. Ze poem, I am ambivalent about it. I want to like it, but ...

Neat. As mentioned above, nice vocab. Love the flow of the piece - there was never a point where your line breaks, punctuation, or rhythm forced me to awkwardly change ...

Well, this was indeed enjoyable to read. However. There are certain flaws that need polishing. Too many exclamation marks! It took away (!) from the candidness and became ridiculous, even, ...

I find this wonderful, particularly the grammatical treat that is line six of "Panic." The only weak point readily apparent to me is the second line of "Consumerism." It is ...

Ooh, a rarity! A rhyming (non-professional) poem that I like. The rhythm is the best part of this; just a few bumps that I wish to amend. In my (not-so-)humble ...

Just from reading, this seems very good. Now to analyze and critique... Love the parallelism throughout - very tight, keeps a focus and the reader's attention. The rhyme I'm ambivalent ...

Firstly, I must agree entirely with the previous poster. The quick lines gave this a song-like feel, to me; I was humming it at times while reading. The imagery has ...

A great story told! Now, the poem itself I shall perhaps be crueler towards. While the pacing kept everything nice and tight, I was disconcerted by the extremely short lines. ...

Amazing. Great use of free verse, enjambment, etc. The poem tells a great (hi)story, of what was back in your '98; I felt as though I was there watching. Third-to-last ...

A nice poem, and one I enjoyed reading. The only thing that bothered me was the leaning tower of Pisa. It was not set up at all and felt terribly ...

Not my usual cup of tea. However, I ended up reading and liking it. As to what the first reviewer said, I agree that rhyme shouldn't be forced.. but the ...

Nice, reminds me of some of my own writing. Granted, your spontaneity seems to be at a higher level than mine. Anyway... I have nothing negative to say about this, ...

Interesting poem. Commanded my attention from beginning to end, no wavering. The line and stanza breaks are excellent - they allow the words to let through the spirit of the ...

Great poem-song! I could really feel this as an enthusiastically-aggressive rap. My only issue was that it seemed to slow down once or twice just because it ran out of ...