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Ok, thanks every one, I will edit those problems, and make them bold. I will get to that, and I am almost done with chapter 2, so they should both ...

Thanks, I will work with all of that. Those typos were iminent, I was dozing off while writting it. Ya, I wanted there to be some simularities, but I think ...

Ya, I know, I am still not sure why I really put it here, any others I will put on Fanfic. I don't know what I was thinking last night, ...

hekategirl is right. The spacing and punctuation helps make it flow. I had to look over the poem again to see what you were trying to say. But I liked ...

Nice, I Liked it, it displays feeling very well. I agree, some punctuation would work. There is nothing really I see to change, but I want to compliment you, it ...

Ok, the entries are are only about a month or two apart, and then he looks back at them a few days later. And he starts out saying "knowin'" and ...

Good, but maybe, if you think it sounds better, it might help the first sentence flow better if you add an and after the third cama. But ya, it works. ...

This is what some call powerfull, it contains a sad part of life that acually happens, and puts it into written word. You did an exelent job on it, keep ...

Nice, I liked it, even the most adult of poets will write a kiddish poem, they are actually quite enjoyable. It was vary good. keep it up.... yo. hehe

I agree with what every one has just said. It was awesome! good job. And they are right, there is nothing I see to really to touch up on. Good ...

The name of the girl I wrote about, her name is Heather, and yes I do like her a lot. We have been going out for 2 months, it will ...