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Re: Dressed In Wine
Hello, love! Aurora here with a quick review for you. Nitpicks first, yes? He wants to make her feel special The syllable count/stress on this one is off, and the ...
Jul 1, 2014 -
Re: Rifted - Chapter V - Dagger
Hello, love. Aurora here for a quick review. Nitpicks first. I loath them. They are squirming, jumping things which tend to be overzealous and under thought. Answers can be worse, ...
Jul 1, 2014 -
Re: The Pact, Chapter Two, Part Two
Hello, love! Aurora here with a review for you. Nitpicks first. I'll only be able to stay out for two days at the most, then he'll get suspicious. You need ...
Jul 1, 2014 -
Re: Placebo Hearts Chapter 4: Spark
Hello, love! Aurora here for a quick review! Alright. You don't have many (if any) grammatical errors, at least that I caught. so we can skip over nitpicks today. A ...
Jul 1, 2014 -
Re: The Book Man, Chapter 59 (Revised)
Hello, love! Aurora here for a quick review. Nitpicks first, ey? “Poor woman. Scared stiff when she got here. All alone, no idea where she was—tried to beat Graham off ...
Jul 1, 2014 -
Re: LWR Characters: Ledan Frienson
Hello, love. Aurora here with a quick review for you. I like this. The only other thing I think you could have included (main thing, that is), is a list ...
Jun 30, 2014 -
Re: The Remaining Survivors: Prologue
Hello, love! Aurora here for a quick review. Hmm. Nitpick first. My footsteps trampled against the soggy ground as I ran. Mud squishing between my toes and water splashing up ...
Jun 30, 2014 -
Re: My Diary
Hello, love. Aurora here for a quick review to help you out. If this is really a diary entry, the you should really considering unposting this and just saving it ...
Jun 30, 2014 -
Re: Story of My Life... More Like Story of Anger.
Hello, love! Aurora here for a quick review. Alright. I really like this. Dark and dreary. My favorite. I only have one critique for you. The second time that you ...
Jun 30, 2014 -
Re: Trembling Power: Chapter Three
Hello, love. Aurora here for a quick review! Alright. I really like this. I haven't read the previous chapters, and I still want to read more :) I can guess ...
Jun 30, 2014 -
Re: Character Profiles: Layla (draft)
Hello, love. Aurora here for a quick review. I like this character. You should include some other things, however. What about her history and downfalls? Her downfalls are her weaknesses. ...
Jun 30, 2014 -
Re: Beautiful.
Hello, love! Aurora here for a quick review. This is really short, and you really should extend it. By A LOT. A chapter should be 800 words minimum. I don't ...
Jun 30, 2014 -
Re: My Ideas Part 2
Hello, love :) Aurora here for a quick review :) Hmm, lets see. I don't really like the ones about youtube mainly because they have no real plot. No offence. ...
Jun 30, 2014 -
Re: Remnants of You
Hello, love! Aurora here for a quick review! God, what a dark piece! I love it! The one thing I'd consider is making this a poem, rather than a short ...
Jun 30, 2014 -
Re: Copper
Hello, love. Aurora here for a quick review. Never thought I'd see the day when I reviewed three poems, back to back. Anyway, that's not the point. I like what ...
Jun 30, 2014