Tenyo

Review part five! I apologise, I have little constructive critisism to offer. Only to echo what I said before that this definately has enough substance to be turned into a ...

Review Part four Presentation! Where has it gone? Always double check your posts to make sure your like breaks are there and your paragraphs don't suddenly clump into this big ...

Review part three! He... he... he... This is the first time I've seen it pop up, but it's good to break this habit early. First, point one, is that repeating ...

Review Part two I like this :) It's enjoyable to read. You've managed to jump straight into the story without leaving the reader behind somewhere. For what I said in ...

Hey Ranger! Happy review day! I'm here to raid your portfoli- review your work. She said something in a particular way and then she did something. Okay, that may not ...

I love it! Reading this poem is like stepping into another world for a while. It's beautifully written, and the whole thing has a strange sense of enchantment about it. ...

Wrote it on the spot - haha, I like. Presentation: To make your work look prettier, keep authors notes in brackets, and all in one pargraph at the top. Then ...

You asked for it. First things first... ...this is short. Being short means there's not much to critique. It also means there's not much to read. Short poems need to ...

Quick note that I didn't mention in chapter five: That big line across the top of the page. It doens't look pretty, and in portfolio view it sticks off the ...

So... I giggled when I got to that last part. I'm sorry. Have you ever tried running full sprint down a sandy beach? Best not try it. Your heals sink ...

I'm back! Damien: Do you have an older brother who you love and treasure? It seems so. I really like Damien, even from the first few paragraphs. I think it's ...

Doesn't it suck when lots of people review your first chapter or so, but then you get nothing for the rest? Then again, there's those people who plaque your novel ...

Ello again The couple: I like these two. They're cute together, though I haven't really been able to work out their ages yet. However I will echo what i said ...

*Gasps and dies* Chatspeak in your intro! Remove it! Chatspeak is to Writers as Garlic is to Vampires. Okay, actual review now. Who said what? 'Said' is a cool little ...

Hiya Rain! Just a quick tip: in posting work you're generally asking for feedback. I find it's not really a good idea to post unedited works on yws because people ...