Tenyo

Aww :( This is sad. I don't think the poem is too long, so if it's longer than usual I think you should stick with this length. I felt both ...

Hey Story! I like this poem. I think as a writer of poetry you've still got a fair bit to learn, but that's why this site is so great! Some ...

Once again I find myself in awe at your work :) I tend to feel intimidated whenever I come to review something of yours because I know I won't be ...

Cute, short, and sweet. Perhaps a little too much of each. I do like this poem, but it lacks a lot in substance. I think it would be better if ...

Wow... That's quite a grand poem. Some of the concepts are strange, and I don't really know what half of those words mean so I can't really offer much help ...

Hey Kiicoh! Poetry is about art, and art is supposed to be seamless. Art hides the pain and strife that the writer went through to make it, so it's supposed ...

Hey Um A lion king fanfiction, there's something I didn't expect. In regard to the other reviews, I didn't think this as very rushed, although I do wish there was ...

Aww! Ookay, let me get this way: Shouldn't Lyn bcold, since he's an ice person? If so, rubbing her to keep her warm whilst standing in front of a fire ...

Review part 10 Great finale :) A minor tweak: Saron through a knife, but both Lynn and Amber ducked to avoid it. Is it possible to aim something as small ...

Review Part 9 I really like this development of Amber being scared of water and energised by fire, and vice versa with Lynn. It would be nice if that kind ...

Review Part eight! Now that the heroes of this story have all been put together I kind of realise how great they are. Individually they all have good, strong personalities, ...

Hey Lupo! I'm not entirely sure what this statue is doing. It's not clear whether it's supposed to be completely inanimate or not. In some places it gives me thA ...

Hey Lupo! I like this poem, as Jojo said it's quite deep. Grammar seems to stand out as the biggest issue here. In poetry the rules of grammar aren't so ...

Review part seven Dull? Not really. Poorly written? Not so much. Raw, I would say. This piece does seem simply like a half woven chapter. No chapter is allowed to ...

Review Part six! I can see that there is time in between the posting of these works, but your writing seems to be improving with each chapter. I hope you ...