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TenToTheFourth

  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: My Story

    This is a strong start! I don't know if it's a short story, or the first chapter of a novel, but I could see it working as either. The intro ...

    May 4, 2015
  • Novel / Chapter » Politics, Satire Re: One Way Out- Chapter Two

    This chapter was funny and a good continuation of the story. The discussion of Rachel's parents' role in her life choices was good satire: exaggerated for effect but nevertheless containing ...

    May 4, 2015
  • Other » Dramatic, Realistic Re: Sorry, I Don't Believe In LOVE

    This is powerful. The ambiguous ending works really well: there are always a few people who fade out of one's view after high school. This piece captures the emotional struggles ...

    May 3, 2015
  • Novel / Chapter » Supernatural, General Re: Dream-Hunters - Chapter Eleven

    The action here is pretty epic. I really enjoyed reading, and the imagery was, for the most part, solid. You definitely don't make the mistake of rushing through the action ...

    May 3, 2015
  • Poetry » General, Dramatic Re: Celestial Song

    I love this piece. With so much emphasis these days on our insignificance and impermanence, and fear as a result, I like how the speaker desires to be at peace ...

    Feb 10, 2015
  • Poetry » General, Literature Re: Climax on the Eastern Front

    Well written. I had to read it twice to get the meaning. My understanding is that the entire poem is a double entendre which refers simultaneously to an act of ...

    Feb 9, 2015
  • Short Story » Humor, General Re: Midnight Snack

    This is an interesting idea. I like the comparison involving the pork chops at the beginning to delicacies in other parts of the world. As well as being funny, you ...

    Feb 6, 2015


okay I think I need to grab some nachos
— BluesClues