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This crit-the-person-above-you business is turning into a three-ring critique circle between you, me, and Kylan. xD Right. Let's begin. Lightning flashed across the blackened sky. Each flash casting s

Wow. The ending really delivered a blow that I felt physically in the pit of my stomach. Now that's craftsmanship. Overall, this is really good. There's not much I can ...

Ahoy! I see you're new here. Welcome aboard YWS! My name is Razorblade. Now, seeing as you're new, there's a few rules to go over before you start posting literary ...

You know, I can't remember what I said the last time I critiqued this, so excuse any repetition! It was a foolish, childish thought anyway. Nix "anyway." In this case ...

Pirates? *hopeful* If these are pirates, HOT DOG! Anyway, you're right, you do a lot more telling than showing, but if you're planning on fixing that, I won't ride you ...

Hi there! I see you're new here. Welcome to YWS! My name is Razorblade. :D Hmm... I'm wondering, does this really belong in non-fiction? Doesn't strike me much as an ...

Interesting flash fiction! It's rather eloquent and pretty. I can see you have talent! By the way, hi! I don't think I've seen you around YWS before. I'm Razorblade. :D ...

Well, I don't pretend to be any kind of poetry expert, so pardon me if I don't know what I'm saying. xD Anyway, I felt the seeds of something good, ...

...Aet, I freaking love you. xD Your sense of humour is amazing. So random and rambling and yet full of underlying genius at the same time. I love the whole ...

Haha, that was cute. I'm assuming that TW Galaxy is Teenage Writers? And Staring is Staring_at_Ceiling, now known as Lindsaroo? Just curious. A few grammatical errors: “Staring , [s]A[/s]activate th

...Wow, Snoink. Just... wow. Very simply put. That was incredible. I love the recurring one-liners. They have so much punch. There's a lot of beautifully portrayed emotion in this. Well ...

Haha, wow. Your humour continues to amaze. You have a few spelling errors here and there, but a quick proofread and double-check would most likely fix those. Otherwise, well done! ...

Okay... this isn't much different from the piece with the same title you posted a while ago. It's still far too short and far too disjointed to really properly critique. ...

...Wow. The epitome of random boredness! This is the second highly amusing tale I've read today. I don't know if my lungs can take the laughter! Very random, very meandering, ...

...Wow. xD I don't think I've laughed that hard in a long time. Impressive, Nate. Very impressive. ...Once again. Wow. -St. Razorblade The Official YWS PIrate :pirate3: