TazmaniaGirl

This is really Good! Ok, so, I'm only 12, so I'm proberly bad at this but... Ok, so, I ahve noticed a few spelling mistakes. I won't really tell you, ...

Well Done! This has been presented clearly, and I love that. You can also kind of tell what's going on. It's also very descriptive, which makes it more intruging. This ...

This is really good! It's very descriptive, and that's a good thing. It's thought out, and of course, set out clearly, which is what most readers want. I can think ...

This is amazing! You have put so much detail into this, and it's describing a story about A boy, and it's JUST REALLY Good! I'm actually struggling to write a ...

This is well written. Mostly because it's very descriptive, and this is what most poems are like, but you've made this one special. But, I don't really get this. If ...

The charcacters are well set out, you can spot there personalitlies. You've done well, and this is very clear, so you can tell whats going on. Sorry if I'm bad ...

Amazing, nice work.

This is amazing. It's in great detail, which always matters. The theme of this story is dragging me in, and if you continue to write like this, you'll becaome a ...

This is brilliant! The description of everything is crystal Clear, and you can create an image in your head of what the scenery and the what the people look like ...

This is amazing! How old are you, this is like grown up stuff! Come on, write more...!