Talulahbelle

I think me fellow reviewers have covered most things except one that kind of popped into my head. What did she plan to do? She obviously knows that her parents ...

I thought it was very good overall, but there are a few things that kept me from really getting into it. First, I don't think the death sequence was very ...

I love this! Its beautiful. I keep imagining a whole story behind it and that, I think, makes a poem good. It reminds me of "A gift in wartime" by ...

Hello! This is really good! Thing is, you lose your tense in the last paragraph. Run should be Ran and "what she does best" should be something like "what she ...

I think daisy got most of everything but there's one section that bothers me that she didn't get. There were only two citizens who had ever had the nerve of ...

Hello, I really loved this and I hope you do right more because I will definitely follow it. The only things I really noticed that you could work on would ...

I'm so intrigued by this! I haven't read the first installment but I certainly will now! There weren't many grammar mistakes (one their that was supposed to be a there, ...

Hey, I feel that everyone else has covered most of the major things...or the nit-picks... make sure you keep everything easy to follow, describe the people and surroundings more and ...

Hey. I think McMourning pretty much covered the grammar, but if you want to PM me I'll be glad to help you with the punctuation rules and all that jazz. ...

I really love this piece. Your writing is very poetic and I was drawn in by the very title. Violent Grin...smashing... I really have nothing negative to say so I'm ...

Hello! I haven't read the first intsallment but I saw that no one else has reviewed this and it always irratates me to see that. Now, I'll have to go ...

Hey! I wanted you to know that sci-fi and fantasy have been mixed and it turned out really good, I thought. There's a series about these alternate versions of the ...

First of all, and this is just MY taste, but I didn't feel that you gave too many details at all. I thought it was well written and the details ...

I love the idea of this story but it does need some more...umph! I think I didnt get connected to Alicia. She needs more personality, I think. I won't say ...

I liked it, but then again I enjoy anything about theives. The one main problem I had was the characters. I think you should spend more time giving them depth. ...