Talking_Pinata

I only somewhat understand what people mean by shoving it down our throats. You take somewhat of an aggressive take on this, but really, it's the way I think it ...

THis is nice but not that complex of writing. Such as "super nice couches". I understand that this may just be the character's way of describing the couches, but I ...

I agree, it is slightly hard to read but after reading it a few times I have to say it is very deep. Cassandra says that it is a cliche ...

People are confused about this? Wow. I thought it was a rather brilliant play on depression. Good job. The only problems I saw were grammatical and spelling and people have ...

Wow. I read the comments first and I was looking for a big laugh. I mean, the turns to saddness and not really happiness. Its like they're slowly admitting because ...

DX You stirred up my disorder! *shakes fist* Oh well. Yeah, you see, I'm almost positive I have some sort of anxiety disorder because at random times or at random ...

Aw. Continue this! I want to know what happens very badly! I got a good description of the day as well, in the beginning, with the popsicles. Only one thing, ...

I also disagree with the first two comments, this is most definitely a short story with some raw emotion that drives you to finish it. Not only does it capture ...

This was very good! It caught my attention in the beginning, and although you lost my attention somewhere in the middle with slight repetitiveness, the ending caught my attention once ...

Once again. I COMPLETELY disagree with the suggestion to make the voice less sophisticated. Children's logic and ideas far surpass us, but they have trouble finding the words to make ...

AH! Everyone! This is supposed to be attatched to the "Yarn-prologue" Me: -___- attacking Mr. Duckworth was self defense of my writing, this is not yet a good working piece ...

Its very entertaining to watch Maki-chan as she DESPERATELY tries to make people stay away from her old writing. I'm probably not helping, but I'll do my best and say ...

1) Yes. The personification fits wonderfully 2) By the time you mentioned a "cap" and the button being pushed, I knew it was a camera, you might do well making ...

Unlike the above review, I am no lover of Simon Cowell. But I think I'm becoming him (doing all these reviews in one day). There was no emotion in this ...

I agree. Simple. and it conveys a message. but. -I agree with the others, the paragraphs need to have spaces inbetween -a couple spelling mistakes can be taken care of ...