Tabithalillian

Very nice again, if any thing at all was wrong with it it was the dialog. It just seemed a little flat to me this chapter but besides that your ...

I stink at nit-picking, so here is my review! Well, the story line seems preety far from twilight. And I love that! Vampire were my favorite since reading Vampirates and ...

Ok, I stink at nit-picking so I am just going to give a plain ol' boring review. :) Well the writing wasnt half bad, I could tell from little bits ...

Oh my gosh! Carlisle was hilarious. Even though he even came in for a breif moment man that was probably my favorite part. You captured him perfectly. Man, I didnt ...

Erg, I am really awful at nit-picking so I think I shall just leave a comment on what I thought of the story. Well Remmy seemed to think alot, just ...

That was great! My stomach hurts now I was giggling so hard. My faovrite part had to be carlile giggling and falling on top of edward. Also stephenie meyer coming ...

Once again I am a totally stinky nit-picker so here is my review: Of course I still love your writing style and how you portray all your charecters. THey are ...

Ok, im awful at nitpicking and grammar my self so I wont comment on that! Any way, one thing confused me. Do they have special smelling powers or some thing? ...

im an awful nitpicker when it comes to grammar and spelling and such but I shall give you my opinion on the story. Well first of all I love how ...

That was chilling but very vivid and you developed the charceters well. I like how you drescribed the mother as beautiful when you got done describing her we could all ...

this is amazing Jazmine. Exactly what I feel like when I see this certian person I shall not name. He is amazing, sweet, nice, and I have only spoken with ...

It was very unrealistic. Dont feel bad I have written a ton of unbeleivabel stuff before. But the dialog was very unbeleivable and the man in the hospital? SHe was ...

very good, a bit less twilight ish, but hey wgat ones of us dont rely on the books we admire. Well bella stwert huh? Nothing a bit more diffrent from ...

I am an awful nit-picker since I stink at grammar myself but I though you gave all the charecters some flarour and attitude so they werent just flat old puppets ...

again you have a nice writing style, but a few things I noticed. One: this girl this "bella" has almost no emotion, she is like a robot. Two: Ok I ...