Tabithalillian

I'm not much of a nitty gritty critique giver, but I tripped across this story and felt I needed to give my two cents. I absolutely loved this, it's kind ...

Hey! Tabitha Lillian here to review again. Once more, do not take any of this really personally I am just looking at the story and saying what I think of ...

Well Sela Locke totally stole my thunder but I totally agree. This entire story I feel like you are just telling me and not showing me. I mean every thing ...

Ok just some basic critique here. First off try and stay away from "purple prose" Which is when you go too in detail with describing things that really do not ...

Hey! I have been reading the story from chapter one and I dont want to sound like a total jerk but the story seems flat. Like you are bopping all ...

I really enjoyed this piece. There was a little cheesy-ness and a little cliche but still awesome. In my opinion all good stories have a little cheese and cliched material. ...

This seems flat and honestly there could be a bit more here to work with. The person above me also has already said what is on my mind. When some ...

This seems like a decent story, well written and interesting. But as people have said before me you could go a little more in depth. Really make me feel what ...

This is great. I am not sure what did it for me but I really really enjoyed this. There was emotion and power behind it and it made me step ...

Hey! I am not big into nitty-gritty stuff so here is just a brief critique of what I thought of the piece. The beginning seemed quite good and very in ...

I thought this was cute! I am an awful nit-picker to I shall just offer a critique. First off I liked how you explained to us your situation in the ...

This was amazing! As every one has already said this is one of the better twilight scrips that I have ever read. I am getting so sick of twilight that ...

Well I loved it! I think the authors versus each other wasn't as funny but I loved the Edward Potter Harry Cullen. It was hilarious and I think I almost ...

I was a more than a little worried when I hear it was cinderella. Cinderella seems to be one of the princessses that just gets written over and over and ...

They are a cute family arnt they! I think their dialog picked back up and you portrayed their emotions and how much they all care for eachother very well. I ...