TabbyGirl

A couple of nitpicks (for the sake of nitpicks)... she couldn't help but notice a stain on his t-shirt. Okay, this is good. This works. I approve of this... however... ...

Good day! Well, I don't think there was too much dialogue, or too much explaining, however, something I would strogly suggest: give a paragraph or two before the initial dialogue ...

Hey there XD I have to agree with halo... I don't really understand why you repeated "she was blind" so many times... I don't think it gave the desired effect. ...

Ahh! Chapter two! Exciting XD Alright, well, not a lot seemed to happen here, which is okay, because it's a transition chapter, but after I read it I did feel ...

Hello again Allie! I see that you're a fan of Warriors as well XD As Rachel said, this seemed like pretty solid writing. A couple of things though... So, something ...

Hello MNC! So, I'm here to review and all XD Something I really liked about this was how you started off with; I tried to scream, but it got caught ...

This was.... really... *shivers*... harsh. But good. I liked it... however, the end was a little bit disappointing... I mean, it seemed like you were just telling us what happened ...

Hmmmm... Intriguing XD I think a lot of people (me included) can relate to this... Wanting to talk to that person who you're going to fall in love with now, ...

Hi XD So, I started reading this, and I was like "YES! I think I'm going to like this story!" Because I love stories about weddings, and I was looking ...

I thought this was a really adequate prologue... I mean, it was sort of confusing in an "I really don't know what you're talking about" sort of way, but... it's ...

I liked this because it had a lot of random fantasy aspects, and it seemed to work... Although, I think, perhaps, you should have started a bit further back... where ...

'Ello my good chap, happy May Day! Now, as for the review... This was powerful... but part of me thinks it could be even more powerful (the part about her ...

Good morning/afternoon/evening! Hmm... weird... I was sort of expecting a deep, romantic plot type thing when I read the title... and, I have to admit, I'm a tad dissapointed... I ...

Hmmm... well, it was intruiging... I mean, yeah, I don't know what's going on, but I guess that'll be explained. This prologue seemed really random... but I sort of liked ...

Whoah! I'm sorry, not meaning to be offensive or nuffin, I'm just a tad blown away by how short this was... I mean... ah, man, this sounds like such an ...