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O.o Holy freak, girl. Haha. Thank you! But, would you mind editing out all of those !!!!? It expanded my page, and I dont' like that. Thanks, though.

So, Sythe, about that part "Shell I'm just an empty shell Why not go to hell?" I know the rhyming really sucks, but I wrote that to connect to Edward ...

Bear >> Thank you so much! Your kind words have inspired me to write more, which I will. You change characters at the end, no? It's confusing for a minute. ...

Thank you all so much! Ink_On_Fire: Thank you! I was thinking that this poem would be a disaster! Thanks for your kind words. I owe you one critique now! Thanks. ...

Hey. I agree with the first reply. It's a really good poem except that it needs rhtym.A poem without it is just a couple of lines. This would be a ...

Yeah. I echo the others. This is a really nice start, although way too short. You really need to expand on it. Otherwise this just isn't enough to be fantastic. ...

Yeah. This isn't really a poem. If it is, I reckon it should have stanzas. But yeah. Sorry. :) :Sythe:

Firestarter, Thank you so much for the review. It's really encouraging! I agree with you. The English accent doesn't really make much sense if it's in Paris... haha. But thanks. ...

Dr. Jamie Bondage, I thought this was wonderful! I was practically singing this song in my head. Everything worked for me - and I'm usually a hard lyricist to please! ...

Cat4Prowl, Thank you! Your kind words have inspired me so much. I'll go back and see if I can change those edits. Thanks a lot! I'll get to critiquing something ...

Wow. Aedomir, you are a fantastic writer. Your words are so brilliant and descriptive that I don't feel I can give a proper critique. I loved the whole story. It ...

Alainna, Thank you so much for the critique! I owe you one now, and I'll get to it quickly! Thanks for the edits; they'll help me later on! I'll go ...