Formerly Heroine

I actually really like the 'Why not go to Hell?' verse, because of the reference to what is quite a philosophical question in the books. 'They lost sight of me ages/Ago' is also a good line but I agree that I don't think 'Ago' needs its own line.

I like the last four sections between the choruses. Don't want to confuse the melodies anyone else might be hearing so look away quickly if you don't want to know this next thought - at this section: 'What's keeping me here?/What's holding me back?', I can only hear the tune of 'Dare You To Move' - Switchfoot.

Ooooh best books ever.

I really liked this poem. It fits really well with the story, and my only critism is when you said "Ago" as one line, it kind of distrupted the flow in my opinion. But that's it.


Aaaah, I love the Twilight series. Can you give me the link of the video on youtube you posted?

Good job!

~Mateeah

So, Sythe, about that part

"Shell
I'm just an empty shell
Why not go to hell?"

I know the rhyming really sucks, but I wrote that to connect to Edward and Carlisle and Bella's views of life after...uh...vampirism... and how Edward thinks, if there is heaven/hell after being a vampire, that he would go to hell. And au contraire Bella thinks that if Edward is with her that she must be in heaven.

Hey, Sythe and Rebirth!!! I wanted to thank you for your reviews! They really helped me!!! So, Sythe, about that part

"Shell
I'm just an empty shell
Why not go to hell?"

I know the rhyming really sucks, but I wrote that to connect to Edward and Carlisle and Bella's views of life after...uh...vampirism... and how Edward thinks, if there is heaven/hell after being a vampire, that he would go to hell. And au contraire Bella thinks that if Edward is with her that she must be in heaven.

But anyway, I'm SOOO glad you loved it!!!!!!! Yay! I did something right!

Thanks!!

Hey how's it going?
I like your lyrics. It reminded me of the band, "Red Jumpsuit Apparatus and their song, Cat and Mouse." I especially like these part;

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Formerly Heroine
I am now villain
a zombie on my feet
No rhythm, no beat
Deep in my memory
Is all that's left of me
I am nothing
Nothing without him
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It may look a bit strange to someone who is not used to only reading lyrics without hearing it or playing it but I think it's cool. By the way, do you have the chords/tabs for these? I would love to play it. Anyway, good day!

Hey! That was really awesome! I really liked it! I've read New Moon and thought it was the best out of the three.

This song really hits the spot that I felt when Edward left. (Yeah, it's a chick flick, but I gotta know why all the girls are swooning over him, yeah?) I felt really sad and empty. This song is just a tad short of that feeling.

Some of the rhyming was a bit forced. Like this:

I'm just an empty shell
Why not go to hell?

My soul
is crushed
My cheeks
are flushed
In the effort to hold on

Formerly Heroine
I am now villain
a zombie on my feet
No rhythm, no beat
Deep in my memory
Is all that's left of me
I am nothing
Nothing without him