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iI know it was a rubbish poem but I was just trying things out No need to get mad brad! hey that rhymes!

Hi conor this could be good if you wrote it like a poem but at the moment its a bit rubbish Sorry Charlotte

No I did not get it from gray's anatomy I wrote it myself What are the elements of poetry anyway? because i have never been taught anything about that Sorry ...

The poem was good and must have taken ages to mmake it read the same back and forth but it was not really my cup of tea sorry Charlotte

I have no idea what you are talking about. Its an good poem but I still don't know what you wre trying tosay Something about a kitchen or murdering someone? ...

Its not fair! you're the same age as me but such a brilliant writer! the poem is so sad and lovely at the same time please write more!!!!!! Charlotte

oh! so that's what a renga is! sorry i don't know very much about that kind of thing I'm only in year 8 so I don't know that many kinds ...

Don't bother rewriting it it's great as it is i know how you feel well i might soon my nan is really sick and so is one of my grandad's ...

Cool poem but I didn't understand what you were trying to say that might have been because i wasn't reading properly or the fact that my eyes wre closed (joke!) ...

Dont't toss it or scrap it! It is a good piece of work just revise it a little and it will be fantastic! I don't think there is a single ...

I think everyone's comments were true I love the ending and the bit where you say "Clawing her way out Of the middle school box Finding a hole to peek ...

wow!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Charlotte

Loved it That is all i can say I havn't a clue what you were talking about but nethertheless I loved it! Charlotte

I like the imagery in this poem There are a few things you could improve but all in all it is a very deep, profound poem I really really wish ...

No I love school but I hate some of the pupil if you get my drift thanks for the comments though Charlotte