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It was very short but I think that was what made it so good. I think I got the hidden message but i'm not so sure. I don't think you ...

A New Me Is this what, I really want? A new life? (why is it a new life? Are you moving?) A new me? (what whould change) If that’s what ...

The start was very gripping! It was quite funny although I don't know if you intended that. The ending confused me. What on earth did she mean bye this?: "Because ...

A flame of desire burns within me, to touch your delicate skin. To feel your warm breath. You drive me insane, with all your love talks But are you real? ...

You know I loved you, [s]You[/s](Put 'I' in instead) know you loved me too. But that can't change the things between us, no. And now it's time to let go. ...

To say, "Someday I will change the world" Who are you to believe? But who are you to disagree? [s]The sky is blue. The grass is green.[/s] Find the light ...

I despise you. I authorized you. You compared me. Please, spare me? Take off that mask. I will not tell. Since I was polite, I do not Change this to ...

If I could make the world as beautiful as you, I'd write the whole world over, Make the skies a bluer blue. I love this part! There would be no ...

play on daughter of the moonlight play through the night play on your gleaming white piano unblemished, unstained, uncorrupted pure and clean, unlike you. Play until your fingers can play ...

is this supposed to be about cutting? What's cutting? I thought it was about you murdering someone or something. But It was good. You kept me gripped as I was ...

i'm a little confused as too what this poem was about but i liked it. My favourite line was: I couldn’t use you just to be on the shelf I ...

That was wow! I loved the repitition and the line about the infantile mind. I really felt for this person and it was a shock when I realised she/he was ...

Definetly change the title but I like it! Add a couple more stanzas/ verses and make the lines more punchy and you have a great poem. (not that is isn't ...

Yeah it is quirky. I liked it. I needs more imagery and a bit more detail. Why does she want to be a poet? How does she become on? etc. ...

I love it! Brilliant word choice and you tackle this subject well! The first two stanza were great but the poem did go on a little bit so maybe you ...