Swavvy123

I get what you mean about the you/your confusion. Thanks, I changed that.

I changed 'nigger' to 'negro'. Seeing as I am black, I generally thought that this would be okay. What do you think? Also, what part did you think was weak ...

hey again, I changed it to 'mould' altough both spellings are correct; one is American and one is British. Also, a queen mother is basically the mother of the sovreign. ...

hi there, okay I'm not sure you got it but it's called 'i am, I am' because the first part detailing the abuse is written in small letters and the ...

thank you so so much!!

Thank you so much. I'm so happy you wanted to keep reading. I wrote this when I was around 12-14 and I've gotten loads better lol. I haven't been on ...

Thank you for this. If Kambili's story continues I will make sure to do further editing. The problem was I wasn't sure what exactly I what I wanted the plot ...

hey! omg i wrote these chapters when i was like 12 lol thank you sooo much for your detailed review it makes me want to continue the story although i ...

Thank you very much!

Since there were so many complaints about the lack of pauses (which wasn't my fault) I decided to add the slashes and the roman numerals to indicate that there should ...

Thank you very much for reviewing this. Like I said below, I did break it up to indicate pauses since I didn't want to use commas but when I published ...

Hi, I actually did break it up into stanzas but when i published it, it came back to this. I actually just tried to edit it but it doesn't work. ...

Thank you very much, I'll definitely try and look into it.

Hi there. Tough review to read lol Firstly, like I mentioned above, I did actually break it into stanzas but when I published it, it became the way it is. ...

Firstly, thank you very much for the review! as for the characters, the writing consists of Kambili's thoughts and not just the narration. She goes to school with these people ...