SushiSashimi333

Yeah, I need more help when it comes to writing in first person. I can try, but when I describe things I guess I never feel like it's realistic. This ...

Thanks! I can update you when other chapters come out.

I'm glad you liked this. I based all the characters off of real people. So it's good that the dialogue is good, cuz that's what they would actually say XD. ...

Yeah. I porbably should show and not tell. I think a lot more about the main character will be shown though when Jack is introduced. Believe it or not I ...

Oh yeah. Heh heh, this story was just me barfing ^_^. I was stuck on my other story but still wanted to write so this came out. I might try ...

Thank! To be honest I have block on this other story I am writing so I decided, eh, why not make another story!? I'm glad to hear that this is ...

Just found out, if you push the "like" button again you can "unlike" it.

Thank you for the link. This info is pretty helpful. ^_^ I think I might have put something about there being three suns in there, so I thought that might ...

Yeah, I did drop a lot of info in this little bit didn't I? I guess I just didn't know what to do because you get to meet them later. ...

Yeah, actually the prologue won't come in until later. The flashback believe it or not actually helps me kind of characterize and show what Cerys has been through, since it ...

I remember this poem! I remember thinking it was really good and that I could actually feel the magic of your words in the air. I still remember that feeling ...

Oh gosh, you boggled my mind O.o

I can try to lengthen it, the only problem is that there's really nothing more to say. I shall definitely play around with the sentence structure there, we can't have ...

And when will that be?

Thanks! I am very glad that you liked this piece, I was worried that I didn't quite capture the darkness I wanted to, thank goodness I did. This actually helped ...