Sunshine

Books, Books, Books!! *Sighs happily* I try every sort of book so be in for a big one. -Ophelia by Lisa Klein -Maximum Ride series by James Patterson -Witch and ...

Wow. stephene said alot but I'm here to give you some kindly pointers. - Never ask if your work is good or bad. There's always going to be a good ...

1st thing: I WANT YOU TO STOP LYING! You should be proud of your poetry because half of the people on here would be jealous. 2nd thing: NITPICKS WITH GRAMMAR ...

I think stephene got all the nitpicks so I'll go with the flow and my personal opinion. Flow: The (can't think of word!) talking is good and flows suprisingly well ...

Um... This was really funny but how in the world did Herminoe randomly show up? Elongate this part! What kind of spells? More examples. Seems a bit short and rushed. ...

*Sobs* You made... Olivia... Lose... Baby? My only thing is that Luke seems a bit young to be a cheif doctor. I mean Doc's spend at least 5 years in ...

Nephths did a whole lot of nitpicks but here's my best shot: -Have a charecter list at the beggining of the script. I think that's how a real script would ...

I think you used alot of good descriptions :) and gave a good picture. IT"S TO SHORT. It's hard to review a piece as short as this. You need to ...

Hi I'm crafty and I'll be your reviewer for today! I think you have a great idea here and I like how you added in the diary entery. "oh really, ...

The first thing I'm gonna say is the title, for it is that in which brought me to the piece. I LOVE IT! Second thing is I liked how you ...

Ok I probaly wouldn't be saying anything at all but since I'm the first to read it... *Sobs* I probaly could say something mean about it ( Ok I'm so ...

Your a poet to! *Gasps!* Anyway, I liked this poem. My only pet peeve was that you didn't capatlize. Also I noticed in the line: I still need you there ...

Love the poem!!

Hmmm. Am thinking... What I noticed is you started with Annabeth with the world in her hands and end with Atlas with the sky in his hands. Is that supposed ...

Just started reading this. I think you're on to something. The plot line in this particlur chapter seemed a bit weak. Maybe deeper dialouge or more explation. KEEP WRITING THIS! ...