Sunshine

Here as requested! Sadly, I don't know anything about villanelles. I'll try my best. FLOW! I think the flow of this poem is overall pretty good except for the following: ...

Here as requested! I'm afraid this will probaly be the only chapter I review. I'm not a fan of 16+ or 18+. I do admire your writing skill though! All ...

Haha looks like everyone beat me to the nitpicking! Eh, that's ok nitpickying is not my type. You have a good, strong idea but it seems very...rehearsed. It lacks emotion. ...

Yikes! I don't think there's a thing to nitpick left! 1.) I do care. You made it sound VERY interesting. Can't wait for more! 2.) :) That's all I need ...

Ok, I'm to lazy to click edit on my other 'review' so here I go! I absolutely love the dialougue you have going on here and DON"T change a thing ...

Yo fiction! Grammar was great and I love the direction this is going in! My only thing is that this should be longer. it seems a bit short. You need ...

Well...Not much to nit picky here ,eh, Skinsy. *Thinks about being jealous of Skinsy's fan girls, than realizes she is one.* He. Anyway... ~The Charecters~ Will seems like a fickle ...

Let me spell it out for you, Incognito. C-L-E-V-E-R! I liked the imagery a lot, the whole fall thing was very interesting and grasps your attention. I don't see how ...

Hey, it's me again! Pink is corrections! Who 's needles and hugs Who 's a knife and is hiding behind my back I see the point your trying to get ...

Here as requested! (Thanks for that, by the way.) This is a very sweet poem! You wrote it perfectly for the reciever. i think fries got all the nitpicks soo..... ...

Hey no reason to be THAT nerveous. *Cackles evilly* Haha, nah just kidding with you. We can be very nice, and ALWAYS helpful. Blue is me! With my hand tightly ...

I see you have four likes but no comments, so I decided to comment. I can't find anything wrong but that may be because I'm being pretty emontional right now. ...

First things first, WHY IS NOTHING CAPITILIZED!!!!!!!! It annoys alot of people here, so please fix it. This isn't a non-fiction. Although your telling it to your brother, It's still ...

I feel special :) First review and you took my kitty suggestion! That was hilarious! I love it. Not the way I was picturing the kitties, but you made it ...

Crafty reporting! The overall idea was pretty good but some of the lines totally threw off the flow. And my love would never waver Everything I did These two lines ...