Sunshine

Hey cuz! I find this funny, true, but my issue is that it's non-fiction (you stated it happened) and you put this in Fantasy. If I were you, I'd put ...

Aw! I can't believe I'm the first one to review this! I admire your monolougue's, I really do Warrior Princess. My only issue with this is how Marie never speaks. ...

I do agree with Rie but hey, everyone does have flaws. ;) I love Victorian stuuff! It's great to see this piece! Pro's Goods before bads, eh? You had great ...

Hmm...this sounds interesting! However, I'm not sure where you're gonna go with this. Is this a prolougue that leads to a flashback of when she started liking Nick? Or maybe ...

I do admit, I'm a sucker for a good Historical story but get easily bored of all the bad ones. Thank goodness I stuck through for this one. My corrections ...

This is ,bluntly, to short. My suggestions: ~Go on with what happens with the figure. This piece could use a little more charecterization. ~ Describe the settings, it's boring without ...

Hi! Welcome to YWS! I liked this poem a lot, especially the ending. My corrections are in green. It was the ocean It was the sea . It was their ...

This was really interesting! Although I've never played the game this is from I'll use my otherwise limited Zelda knowledge to understand it! I'm a little late (again) but I'll ...

Oh dear...looks like I'm a little late here... Oh well! Giving my opinion anyway! I am super impressed with your imagery. Fly with me now,don't need to ask how. Spread ...

Hehe. I liked this poem. It was sweet and devilish at the same time. However, I think there are some things that could be made longer. What did you say ...

Hey again emmy! Glad to be the first one here. I'm gonna try something new here so stick with me! Comments in blue! A chubby Mayor Thomas lied shirtless on ...

Hi! Welcome to YWS! I'm Crafty and I shall be your reviewer for today. Corrections in green Light, t he warm beam of the sun shining through my bedroom window ...

Hey! Although I don't know much about Mineral town I think I can use my other references. ;) You have no grammar or spelling mistakes that I can see. (Lucky!!!!!) ...

Signature=Lovely song. Ok, I'm not here to reminence about that song (which I love) I'm here to be your reviewer! *Takes out paper and pencil.* My corrections are in green. ...

Finally here! I think you have a good idea and well built charecters, but this seems a bit short for a novel or even a novella. This is just in ...