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Oh, and I have a little bit more feedback. You know how you have the links of the characters? I don't think it is a good idea to post it ...

Strong starting sentence, good. Nice word choice (rendered, framing). Oh, and I really like the title.

Part two of "Wrong or Right" was more intriguing than part one. I like the word choice: risqué, entrapped, freelance, and shimmy.

Try capitalizing the first letter of the first word after each line break. The poem itself will look neater. Content-wise, that was phenomenal. Great job.

I like how you related real books into Emily's diary/journal. Maybe a little bit of an overuse on "freaking"? Else than that this was great.

“God, I haven’t drank that much since the party of the defeat of Voldy-mort,” Ron staggered in Harry’s office. The black-haired man watched with amusement as his best mate slumped ...

CHAPTER TWO _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ Harry watched with faint amusement as Hermione was met with yet another invitation ...

Nice lines. I like how you used repetition to make a point. I also agree with uniaeca about the "will" instead of "well." Addicted to You is a great title.

This was a powerful piece. You described everything well and it fit the quiet, clandestine setting. This is definitely worth a gold star. I hope to read more of your ...