StoryWeaver13

Thank you much!

Thanks. :D And i guess (in my mind, at least), I see these "cages" as a part of the delusion that things haven't changed, though I also imagine them more ...

Thanks as always. :D

Um, no. I usually don't write stuff like this but after my dad came home extremely drunk for the thousandth time, I wasn't exactly in my "happy place." Thanks for ...

It's a satire. Hence the whiny hateful character.

The tiny fix I have is this - before someone's speaking, the commas should be replaced with periods unless it's something along the lines of "Ruby said, ' [insert comment ...

Oh, and by the way, welcome to YWS! :D

This piece has already been reviewed out the wazoo, so I'll just say that this is brilliantly deranged. Keep writing, StoryWeaver

I got really into this! I already love Pietro and want to know who the scary men are and who it is that's narrating this story and more about the ...

This isn't going to be a very constructive comment, I can promise that right now, but I just wanted to say that this is pretty spectacular. I love the original ...

Grr, double-post! Sorry. :/

I like this! I can tell the character's pretty hard-shelled, perhaps bitter or even antisocial, and typically that turns me off - but I want to keep reading about him. ...

Beautiful words, particularly in the second stanza, but it was also pretty thick and hard to decipher. I read it twice - the first time because it sounded pretty and ...

I like it. My one problem is that it sounds a little like "saunter" though.

Freaking brilliant. That is all.