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Lauren, this is a very interesting piece, not least because it doesn't involve zombies. “Let’s keep it moving, Rayn,” Why is it unacceptable to spell "Rain" properly, when used as ...

adventurous spirit he was Don't forget the comma here- thus "adventurous spirit that he was," when the World was young Unless 'the World' is the name of your realm, there's ...

Hello there Jojo. an endless blanket of ancient sunsigh trees I already love the name 'sunsigh.' Maybe a blanket isn't the best metaphor, though. before the recollection of time. We ...

I agree about breaking this into stanzas. That can be tricky, but it shouldn't be much trouble. Also, I like how this poem doesn't quite rhyme. I often ruin a ...

Hello my friend! I just saw your post on my wall, so forgive my tardiness. Seeing as you already had the grammar reviewed, I'll talk about the content. First of ...

Hey there, fellow writer! I would dearly love to see the woman's healing process. That is, if you ever decided to extend this piece. I see it's already been reviewed, ...

First of all, you should always start a new paragraph each time someone speaks. I'll show you an example. “Hey tree hugger, what are you up to?" “Just waiting for ...

the pain that had plagued him since. Since when? he usual place at the table That's "her" usual place. I think you manage to tell a very complete story in ...

I'm not sure this belongs in Historical Fiction. If you were to ask a mod, they'd be happy to move it for you. And the chewed, weather worn, plastic Igloo ...

It's me again, Tail. Here goes. feeling strangely familiar Do you mean that her surroundings are strangely familiar? She was in the maid uniform What does it look like? This ...

Tail, Tail.... he was clearing used to giving orders. Remember? It's 'clearly'. The effect was strangely fearsome, There's no need to repeat 'strangely' here. Perhaps there's another word that would ...

It seems you're in need of a review. “Bookends”. It's usually ok to put the period inside the quotation marks- thus, "Bookends." He was at the cash register, ringing someone ...

I see you've fallen prey to the No-Setting Bug. Adding a few details about New York- like whether the chapter is set in New York City or in the country- ...

Fiction, that was brilliant. And angel I had never even met before An angel; I'm sure this was just a typo. to chang someone's life. Change. Thus ends my spelling ...

Hello. I'll be pointing out a few minor mistakes here. Nims usually fly to low This should probably read "too low to" over the four moons she weaved, "Weave" is ...