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Good job keeping this suspenseful. They lived the span of three United States states away from it, so Clay knew that they must have The States vary a lot in ...

That's very good, actually. In just a second I'll review it properly. ‘It needed a friend’, I'm not sure that the boy would think in past tense. If you quote ...

weighing at 6 pounds, I noticed this right away. Usually the phrase is "weighing in". At 7 old, I banged my head falling off the table. I landed head first. ...

Me thinks this could use some help. ''i love daughter. Don't forget, "I" is always capitalized. Don't ask me why, though. when you saw only one set of footprints, This ...

How odd is that? I also have a brother who got engaged, under similar circumstances. On the subject: She and Adam have been dating for almost three years and she's ...

Now for the good report... This might be very effective as a 'verse novel'. Basically, that means you tell the entire story as a poem. If that's what you were ...

So... *wise Alec* why is it that girls are "beautiful" but boys are "hawt"? Honestly... After reading your lyrics, by the way, I wonder why more people can't be more ...

Hello there, Sweeny. Shall I give this a good going-over? Zed had brought Richard threw the forest and taught him which plants would help heal wounds faster and which plants ...

This is something else. When Mayor Kane raised his eyebrows, still waiting for a response, I licked my lips. I don't know for sure, but I think I've heard of ...

I see you're all set for a demigod story. Here goes. "Justin!" I sat up straight "What?!" I snapped at my sister Don't forget- each new speakers gets a new ...

I don't think this is boring. It could use a bit of explanation, though. Her father was having aloo puri while reading the newspaper. You might know what this is, ...

Wow. I've yet to see a story like this where the main character wasn't bitter about their situation. The first thing I'd like to point out is your dialog. It's ...

What you've got here is like the story's skeleton. Filling in details would help to bring it to life. On December 23, 1929 about two months after the stock market ...

Hello there. I'll simply point out a few errors. all at the same tempo Tempo usually refers to the timing and speed of a piece of music. Perhaps you meant ...

Don't forget the most important rule of dialog! Always start a new paragraph for each speaker. “Yes I can.” and the speakers made their weird dinging noise. Ok, this could ...