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quote]It is like crocodile skin made into fancy ladies' boots.[/quote] Love the imagery here. But you gotta look for it. This doesn't fit the style of the piece. Maybe try, ...

I really like this. It has a very clean, powerful feeling to it. [I on the other hand-- need to fly in my own direction[/quote] "I, on the other hand, ...

It seems you need a serious critique. One says Don't capitalize. Only if it's a name or the first word of a sentence. She wakes a month later In a ...

:) Nice. I don't know how many times I've said this: use a period at the end of dialog, if it's the end of a sentence. she greeted me brightly, ...

Then I studied my reflection, That should be a semicolon. Moving to the side I could help but admire Moving to the side, I couldn't help... That's about all I ...

I smile, Stars are like I smile. "Stars are like..." There is a pause before it says, the ocean. The ocean. Overall, I like this very much. The description is ...

I've been enjoying this. :) Here's the review. Lithium would smack him eight ways to Sunday. I believe the saying is "six ways to Sunday." And where there's a will- ...

1. Does it mak you want to keep reading? Yes, it does. 2. Is there anything I could make better? You mean besides cutting out "double the death penalty"? 3. ...

One thing I think you should be aware of: it sometimes rhymes, and sometimes doesn't. Maybe you meant to do that? death grows many Shouldn't that be "deaths grow many"? ...

His plea echoed, his plea echoed... I know you tried to create an echoing effect here, but it doesn't work. He came running to the bridge direly I don't think ...

I'd listen to that speech. But there were a few errors. we are all human That doesn't present a strong case. You could say that belugas and orcas are both ...

Not bad, not bad at all. I found some errors, but they're easy to take care of. All I felt was the sudden bliss as the pain was suddenly gone. ...

I say, I'm enjoying this too. Although I could point out a few things. First off, I think "Oakwood" is a lame title for a forest. Try thinking of something ...

That must be one patient horse. She puts up with a dog, a dragon and a smart-alec cat. Anyway, the review. She was ready, but her sleeping pets did not. ...

harder to breath That's "breathe." She noticed the blazing fire Again, like Miya said, this could use stronger phrasing. "She realized with a shock that the kitchen was on fire." ...