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Re: Red Stripes, White Stripes, Our Stars
This is a beautiful poem. I'm pretty sure you didn't focus on the technical aspects of the poem or try to create any rhyme scheme, but the poem itself makes ...
Feb 1, 2010 -
Re: Young Love... Pfft?
I used to be a nonbeliever, 9 * I doubted every notion, 6 We can’t just slap hearts on a wall, 8 Or create it with a potion. 7 ** ...
Jan 28, 2010 -
Re: On Wrestling
The overuse of spacing and lines kind of threw me off a little bit. Other then that, a few irrelevant rhymes/transitions("nothing" doesn't rhyme with "something," and sounds rather weird to ...
Jan 27, 2010 -
Re: Dirty Jokes
but the childish discovery of these petty phrases are a childhood and teenage love. This completely threw me off the poem; I don't know why. The number of syllables changed ...
Jan 26, 2010 -
Re: Would Could Should
I'm going to start by saying that I throughly enjoyed it solely because it's so true. Quite the interesting topic you chose, and executed rather well. Also, the title of ...
Jan 25, 2010 -
Re: Gravity
It's a very interesting poem, I might say. I loved the first stanza, but the rest of it didn't make too much sense to me. It's probably because you're supposed ...
Jan 25, 2010 -
Re: Hint
Very easy on the brain to read. I like that in a poem.. You probably should have put quotation marks ( "" ) around "Take a hint, okay?" because you ...
Jan 25, 2010 -
Re: A Part Of Me
The grammar has to be the thing the threw me off the most. I couldn't manage to get much of a feel of the poem because of the choppiness of ...
Jan 25, 2010
