StarDuster

To start, this is very good. The beginning all seems sort of cliche, but maybe that's just because I'm tired of school.. I'm working on a story where I have ...

This is a very good start. It was a little awkward going from one person to the next in only 3 paragraphs. At first I thought maybe you should give ...

I really really liked this, as well. Yes it was a little hard to read... but that made it unique. I really liked the whole idea you had going through ...

I, too, really liked this piece. You have a very unique style. The first two lines did seem a bit of an awkward way to lead into the poem, but ...

The title was what first caught my eye. So I decided to look into it. Then I couldn't stop reading. I would do some constructive criticism, but I can't think ...

I, of course, really liked this. A few little pointers, just so I'm helpful for once instead of only completely gushing :D (though I'm sure you can't mind that too ...

This was really good. I liked how you made everything flow without feeling any need to rhyme or anything like that. The first stanza I really liked. It seemed the ...

This was very good, but I found these lines so close together seemed a little repetitive: No phrase can I find; No pigment can I find . If you could ...

I thought overall this was pretty good. You might want to watch your rhyming and also watch how the verses flow. You did a fairly good job for making it ...

Loved how you got to Jacob. I found it a great read. You should definitely continue. I'm wondering about why Heather has so many dogs...I guess I'll just be waiting ...

I thought this was really unique, definitely very cool. I want to read more. From what I've read from the replies, people don't like the title... but I it caught ...

I really liked the potential in this story. The candy cane and the blood thing was intriguing. Like said before, it is vague. The transition from the park (?) where ...