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Squirtlepowiee

  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Science Fiction Re: Children of the Pyramid: Chapter 2; A city of Faux Gold

    Hey! Squirtlepowiee here for another review. I’ll keep it short because a lot are my personal opinion and I won’t include that. "Shujaa, Boss Nia wants to see you in ...

    Feb 20, 2017
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Historical Fiction Re: The Fire Underneath of Things - 1.1

    Hey! Squirtlepowiee here for another review! This will be a very short one, because this piece is very lacking in errors. That’s a job done perfectly! “The door creaked open ...

    Feb 20, 2017
  • Poetry » Romantic, Spiritual Re: Faceless one

    Hey! Squirtlepowiee here for another review! Such amazing talent you possess... I interpreted this as cyber bullying going on without punishment and without fear. Faceless people are what people assum

    Feb 20, 2017
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Action / Adventure Re: Quest for Fire ~ Chapter 15 ~ The Wisp Talon Village

    Hey! Squirtlepowiee here for another review! Today, I will make a very short one. “The shadows grow longer, creeping along the ground like the ominous feeling sliding along Zoltar’s scales.” ...

    Feb 8, 2017
  • Novel / Chapter » Supernatural, Mystery / Suspense Re: The Pariah of Levon, 4

    Hello! Squirtlepowiee here for another review! “When Devin woke, she was sprawled across a tweed couch.” This wasn’t a very good start to be honest. Try starting the chapter with ...

    Feb 8, 2017
  • Novel / Chapter » Humor, General Re: Dreaded Dinner Party Chapter 3.5

    Hello! Squirtlepowiee here for another review! “Curi monologued in her head a lot, sometimes in praise or criticism. No one knew how many one-sided conversations she had. She liked herself ...

    Feb 7, 2017
  • Novel / Chapter » Teen Fiction, Fantasy Re: Scolopendra chapter 4

    Hello! Squirtlepowiee here for another review! “He aimed and shot, a loud crack echoing throughout the forest.” Through instead of throughout should be sufficient enough. “Still, the creature tu

    Feb 7, 2017
  • Novel / Chapter » Dramatic, Teen Fiction Re: Earth's Child- Chapter 2 *Edited*

    Hello! Squirtlepowiee here for another review! “Warm air brushed across my face; contrasting with the fact that I was cold.” I would not use the ; here. You can just ...

    Feb 7, 2017
  • Novel / Chapter » Teen Fiction, Dramatic Re: The Child House Chapter 1

    Hello! Squirtlepowiee here for another review! This time, instead of reviewing after I read, I’ll review during. “We depend on the snow to survive, soon it will all have melted ...

    Feb 7, 2017
  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: wouldn't want a crown part ii

    Hello! Squirtlepowiee here for another review! Wow, you are truly an amazing person! I have never met someone with a little errors in their writing as you are. Now onto ...

    Feb 7, 2017
  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: wouldn't want a crown part i.

    Hello! Squirtlepowiee here for another review! I just have a few things to say about your story. Very few errors and I will get to them in a sec: “But ...

    Feb 6, 2017
  • Novel / Chapter » Horror, Realistic Re: Grave Digger 2.

    Hello! Squirtlepowiee here for another review! As I was reading, I noticed very few mistakes. Very very few. Nice job! Now for the ones I noticed: “He skims his fingers ...

    Feb 5, 2017
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Action / Adventure Re: True Magic

    Hello! Squirtlepowiee here for another review! I was reading through the story, when I found mistakes. Lots of them. It’s okay to have mistakes, but remember the rules of grammar ...

    Feb 5, 2017
  • Other » General, General Re: Depression

    Hello! Squirtlepowiee here for another review! I don't have much to say because this is a very short piece without many mistakes. Just a few, and I'll list them here: ...

    Feb 5, 2017
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Humor Re: Glorious Fantasy Ch.7: Legendary Stick

    Hello! I'm back with another review. This time, I don't have much to say! I didn't see many errors or weird sentences. If you reread your story, I'm sure you ...

    Jan 29, 2017


If a million people say a foolish thing, it is still a foolish thing.
— Anatole France