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Hey Kenpachi. Serena jumped off the boulder and started off for Fian at full stride, “I didn't realize you were such a crybaby-” Sevil jumped off the boulder and ran ...

Hey Pingu. :D The hundreds of dresses are lined carefully, but tightly, next to one another, pressing together. You wonder, vaguely, if any will be of use before continuing your ...

Hey there man. I haven't seen you at all around these forums. Welcome to YWS and we hope you'll stay with us forever :twisted: I'll be your reviewer for today. ...

One’s love for the world Derek, that’s my name and this, is my story. It starts on a day like any other; average day, average problems, average life. While everything ...

Hey Mr Jigglypuff. I did promised to review this when I was chat. Sorry that I took so long, I was busy with school work and stuff. You'll noticed that ...

Hey there Lucy. Well I did promised to get around to doing this. So here we go. A small trickle of water fell from the gutter along my roof and ...

Hey there Vernon. You asked and I'm here to deliver the verdict. Rain crashed down against the window, followed by muffled rumblings and bright incandescent flashes. The old General scratched ...

Hey there. The poem doesn't really have a specific purpose or message that you are trying to convey. To me, they seem to be a bunch of metaphors and similies ...

Hey there Camille. Sorry if I haven't reviewed your work earlier. I'm quite busy lately with life and school work. So I apologize. Ok you've pmed me to check this ...

Hey there Valor. I'm supposed to be doing my poetry analysis essay, but I thought that I should critique this first. You are that important :) The line went all ...

Hello! Disappointing Camille, calling me a random member on my guest book "face/palm :cry: ". Here we go: Thud. The arrow flew straight and true, feathers flashing in the mid-morning ...

Hey there Gwen. Well you've summoned me to critique your revised edition. Here I am, ready to strike. Her scarlet hair dangled over her smooth slopping shoulder, her spine rippled ...

Hey Reakeda, First of all, I would like to say that Azlia has pretty much covered as to what I've thought of this piece. What I would like to add ...

Hey there, and welcome to YWS. Detectspie Nathan Fondue yawned. It wasn't a particularly exciting yawn, just another garden-variety sleepy yawn. 1. What is a detectspie (is dumb). 2. What ...

Hey Lucy. (this is critique no 3 out of 75 ). Slowly he slid the smoothness of the back of his hand along his mouth, removing the fluid, before taking ...