SporkPunk

Hey Mist! Sporks here as requested. :] I'm going to start off by correcting anything grammar related I see. :D Red is punctuation and such, green is word choice, and ...

Hi and welcome to YWS! I'll just take the time to point out that you don't really need to beg for critiques. :) People will find your piece, like I ...

Hi! I'll be reviewing this today. As for your theme, unfortunately I've not had enough experience, so I'm not going to review it from that angle. I have a couple ...

Hi austenite! I was intrigued by both pieces, so I'm here to review as requested. Grammar My bedroom was at the front of the house, and last summer, in a ...

Hi austenite! Here to review as requested. :D So, my reviews work like this: Grammar, then plot, then overall. Let's begin. Grammar: While your grammar is mostly great, I have ...

Hi there, blackbird! Here as requested. Grammar: The diamond necklace was like broken glass in her hands, exuding some harsh innate gleam. I think a comma after harsh would be ...

Kyou! It's me again, here as requested! :D First, before I truly begin, thanks for having me read this again. I feel like you found my review really helpful, which ...

Hi! Welcome to YWS! I'm going to try my hand at reviewing this. I can't really critique syntax or grammar because, well, the poem is essentially onomatopoeia. As interesting as ...

Hi! SporkPunk here to review your work. :D I'm still new to reviewing poems, so I apologize if any of this is off. :D I'm not going to go through ...

Hi! Sporks here to review. :D Grammar: I didn't really find anything, though I am going to be extremely nitpicky for a second: “Her name’s Rachel, she’s pretty wild if ...

Hiya peanut! SporkPunk here to review your work. :] Red is grammar, green is word choice, and purple is my commentary. My fingertips tingle as they drum against the script. ...

Hi, I'm Sporks and I'll join this group of reviewing, as I saw this on Featured Works and was intrigued. I must admit, this is the most rough...unedited piece I've ...

Hi! It's me again. :D I'm going to be as thorough as possible with this review. I still find quite a few grammatical errors, a good way to combat that ...

Hm. This isn't bad. :] Grammar: I have a few nitpicks here, but I'm not going to tear your piece apart. I'll just give you some examples of things I ...

I really liked this. :D I think, like the reviewer before me, you could make it not-lacking by adding a stanza or so. I don't have much to nitpick, because ...