Spitfire

Okay, well I read chapters nine and ten, but I'm just going to comment on this one since I thought it would take a while to correct the mistakes... He ...

Well hey there! Review time! I thought the chapter was really good. I haven't read the original, so I definitely can't compare this one to the other one, but it ...

First review, yay! Okay first things first, really liked the chapter! Happy for Noah that he finally got something good out of his life! There were maybe about two grammar ...

This was really good, although kind of bad for the horse :lol: I really enjoyed your writing, details but not too many. Plus, the prologue got my curiousity, which is ...

I like this chapter a lot. Love the way Lindsey gets pissed and all because she says Jake thinks she weird, it's so...normal, natural, something a lot of people have ...

I really like your story, it's really interesting. The only thing is that you have so many mistakes everywhere, that it's distracting and rather bothersome to read. You'll have to ...

Well since I had read it already, I will only recommend :lol: I like the prologue very much, and think it's really good for people that didn't quite get everything ...

This chapter was entertaining, but I found some things seemed...off. When you talk about Maria in this chapter, you only refer to her as "Maria", you rarely - if ever ...

Okay, well I'm really enjoying this story so far. Like fairygirl said though, I'd add more detail to her training and all... Also, I'd be careful of the too-easy-going story. ...

Huh. Really good. I like the story and I'm wondering why the can man would want to hurt her. My only thing is that your MC seems to talk to ...

Okay well here I go! The story was good and I really liked the characters. They seem very realistic, like any disfunctionnal family. :wink: There were some grammar errors a ...

All righty then. First post, yay! The story is good and I'd definitely like to read more. My only worry is that the MC seems too wise for a kid ...

Really good! Although it's too bad what happens to Miranda and the rest of them. This kid seriously has bad luck! “What happened, Noah?” Cole whispered anxiously. He had never ...

Wow, that was really good! For me, actually, my first thought was to the Jet Li movie called Unleashed, too :lol: . The fact that the narrator talks about the ...

Wow, you really caught my curiosity with your chapter! It's really good, although you basically don't know anything yet. I'm pretty sure a lot of people could get hung up ...