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  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Prologue:Cineraceus

    I thought this was really good - a lovely idea. I'm really glad you posted it. It was a pale green grassy patch with little critters (this sounds a bit ...

    Sat Feb 20, 2010 9:23 pm
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Without Death

    Hey, After reading your haikus, I went straight to your portfolio to see what else I could read of yours. You're a really good writer, with really nice images. Here's ...

    Fri Feb 19, 2010 11:15 am
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: haiku - life

    Firstly, very nice! I love the images in both of these. I'll start with the first one: The first two lines sound a bit like they're saying the same thing? ...

    Fri Feb 19, 2010 11:04 am
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Withered

    I really like this. There were only two nitpicky things, one of which has already been pointed out. The other was I didn't think clutch to my flesh read quite ...

    Thu Feb 18, 2010 7:49 pm
  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: Untilted -- Suggestions Welcome!

    Overall I really enjoyed it!It's really good - especially for someone who hasn't written a stor for over a year. I am intrigued by Drysks, but there were a couple ...

    Thu Feb 18, 2010 10:27 am
  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: The Assassin's Redemption- Redrafted

    Hey, I really enjoyed this! It is described really well, but, like Aushy said, I think you need to describe some of the surroundings. Trying to incorporate it without slowing ...

    Wed Feb 17, 2010 3:13 pm
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, General Re: They often say, never bring a peacock feather inside.

    I really like this - it's very original and you have a really unique writing style. Kai is already an intriguing character. However, some parts confused me or jarred a ...

    Tue Feb 16, 2010 6:50 pm
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Moonlight (a haiku)

    Firstly - this was really good. I loved the last line. However, (and I am not really sure how to explain this) the first line Moon light though windows could ...

    Tue Feb 16, 2010 6:43 pm


They who talk all day of beauty call all the plain things dirty
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