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Wow, geez, you're right; this does remind me of Joab a bit. Josephus the Jewish historian believes that Joab murdered Abner and Amasa because he was terrified of losing his ...

Wow, geez, you're right; this does remind me of Joab a bit. Josephus the Jewish historian believes that Joab murdered Abner and Amasa because he was terrified of losing his ...

Okay, I'll probably change it, then, but I'll have to test it to see if it feels right.

(er, I don't know what's with the weird formatting there...)

%u201CThe Sisters are paying the first month of rent for me on an apartment,%u201D Bridget replied, %u201CIt%u2019s $500 a month.%u201D There's that in this chapter too.

Thanks again! Yeah, both these characters have a very hesitant, round-about, stammering manner of speaking, but I did see a few places where I could replace ellipses with other punctuation. ...

Thanks for another helpful review! Rumpelstiltskin's "advice" came in telling Kaelin that her mother was dying of a shadow curse (the mother's backstory is in Chapter Four), and that the ...

Thanks again for the review! I'm especially glad that you pointed out a spot where I could add more description, since that's an area of my writing that I'm particularly ...

Thanks again! Please don't compliment me on the "Four Feet" and "No Feet At All" names, though, because those are taken out of Kaelin's fairy tale. ^_^ Right now, we're ...

Thanks for more reviews and your helpful suggestions! I'm kind of excited at how quickly you're burning through this, but I haven't had time to catch up on responses, and ...

Thanks for the review! I was really excited to see a review in my notifications. :P So do you want me to tell you why Kaelin needs to reach the ...

*like the narrator is sitting and talking to you

Thanks! The "paraphrasing my own sentences" thing is kind of a new trend in my writing, and while I feel it's effective in places, I wouldn't be surprised if I'm ...

Oh drat. I don't speak this language.

Okay, so I see I misunderstood Casey somewhat in that I didn't get which gender he was physically born as...but I think that mistake was all right, because his explanation ...