Somommy

Great Story! I really like the story! I really like paragraph number 8 when the gunpowder blows up, I really liked how you put that in there. In paragraph number ...

Great story! I like that I could tell who was who talking. I wonder if at the beginning there was a backstory on how they meet. Maybe you could go ...

Great story!!! I loved your story I was so into it! I like that you really didn't rush that much but you rushed the story more towards the end. I ...

Great story! I like that you indented every time someone talked but not at a paragraph. I wonder if could have been a longer story so it is not rushed. ...

Great story! I like that you twisted it up when he was caught by the master and also when Siddhartha was in Qufu where Confucius lived. I wonder if you ...