Snowery

Scarli! I'm back to review your second chapter! :) Main Points Deja vu, he corrected after a moment. Okay, so you have to careful with things like these when writing ...

Hey Scar! Silver here to finally review my adopted novel :) (Sorry it took so long :/ ) Anyways so I'll go through the main things as I read and ...

Deanie! :) Main Points “Don’t,” Mei said. I like this whole thing with Mei, you've added some complexity to her character and you're making us question her moral standing and ...

Deanie!! (I love your username by the way, have I ever told you that? XD ) Main Points I knew it was Ayano! Yash! *fist pump* Kor called in back ...

Deanie!! I'm going slow I know but it's the best I can do now that uni has taken over my life :/ Main Points She stared straight ahead with glassy ...

Deanie!

Megsy!! Another chapter to be gobbled up! So... who are the Niditians? I don't believe you've mentioned them before. I can only assume it's the land this story is set ...

Heya Megs! Silver back again! :D Main Points The monarch's 'warnings' This whole paragraph was great! We're finally understanding why we should be mad at the government and also why ...

Hey Alchy!! I came back to review your last chapter so far! :) Main Points metal is not meant to be shaped. This is interesting :) Yes”, Sethis seemed to ...

Deanie! Hey :) I'm back again. Main Points Call the police Okay, I'm pretty sure that this is a problem that others have addressed in previous chapters. Why is Avril ...

Hey hey Megs! :) Main Points stained navy and dotted with small golden stars XD For a moment I thought you were talking about her teeth :D She caught him ...

Megsy!! Hey :) I promised I'd be here before the next review day and I'm keeping it :D His assassin was young Princess Ihynu, So is she a princess by ...

Hey there Sherri! Silver back to review another chapter! :) Wow, this was a long one 0.0 Main Points killing a disrespectful child a few years after she had taken ...

Alchy! Silver is back to review another of your wonderful chapters! :D Main Points It was strange how Flame haven’t appeared back again. A recurring problem that I've noticed within ...

Alchy, my bro! What's up yo? :D Main Points The girl sighed out of surprise, I would actually use "gasped" rather than "sighed". Gasped is used more for shock or ...