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Re: Mr. Bill
Hey!! Silver here for you with a review!! Well there's not much I can say after Iggy and Isha stole everything *frowns*. What I will say is that throughout the ...
Apr 29, 2014 -
Re: The 2020 War Chapter 1 The Letter
Hey Myname!! Silver here to review your chapter! :) So let's get to it? Main Points assuming a lot of junk mail. I've never assumed junk mail before and I'm ...
Apr 29, 2014 -
Re: Soul's Decay : Chapter Eleven
Hey! Silver here for a review! Hey! I'm back. Main Points reaching with his his hands One “his”. so many people hates me now “Hate” shouldn't be plural. Anyway, I ...
Apr 29, 2014 -
Re: Soul's Decay : Chapter Ten
Hey!! It's Silver! Back. Again. XD Main Points The forest hadn’t changed for many countless years Many or countless but not both. Abel was practically strangling his hands, I'm starting ...
Apr 28, 2014 -
Re: Close Your Eyes
Hey Silver here to give you a review!! I loved this! It was a full bodied and satisfying story, much like a really good coffee. Great descriptions, your work was ...
Apr 28, 2014 -
Re: The Stars in Her Eyes - Chapter 2 Part 2
Hey Noelle! I'm back to review your story!! :) Main Points By them, Milo was sure that George was referring to the rest of the Myriad. I thought that this ...
Apr 28, 2014 -
Re: The Cobra's Cage: Part 0.5
Hey Goldie!! Silver here to review for you!! Okay, I'm sure that you realise by now that you are extremely gifted when it comes to descriptions and imagery. You manage ...
Apr 28, 2014 -
Re: Twelfth Night: Chapter Four
Hey KnightTeen! I'm back! :) Man Points a man and a women, Typo, it should be "a woman". I think she would like to here this, Another typo, it should ...
Apr 27, 2014 -
Re: Twelfth Night: Chapter Three
Hey again! Silver back to review! :) Main Points The three were once again in the kitchen, only instead of cleaning Hmm, wouldn't "cooking" fit better then "cleaning"? But most ...
Apr 27, 2014 -
Re: Power Surge- Chapter One of the Rift Series
Hey CyberScout! Silver here to review for you! :) Okay, so this was an interesting piece of work, it was a cool idea for you to use a power surge ...
Apr 27, 2014 -
Re: Twelfth Night: Chapter Two
Hey! I'm back again! :D Main Points that once was bright but not was strewn with black in a sign of morning. I found this sentence hard to understand. I ...
Apr 27, 2014 -
Re: Twelfth Night: Chapter One
Hey! Silver here to review for you!! :) Main Points “I wish you had not saved me, Captain.” her voice was colder than ice. There should be a comma instead ...
Apr 27, 2014 -
Re: Don't Look So Forlorn - Chapter 1: Humble Beginnings
Hey rawr! Silver here to do a review for you!! :) Main Points Quite annoyed, really I myself was. I thought that was phrased little funnily, maybe try removing the ...
Apr 26, 2014 -
Re: Soul's Decay : Chapter Nine
Hey! I'm back again! :) Main Points “Done yet?” she asked, bored. “That’s enough for today, I guess,” Mason retorted, Remember, new speaker means new line. When he started to ...
Apr 24, 2014 -
Re: Escape From Rainbowland Chapter 1
Hey lost!! Silver here to review your story for you! :) Main Points It seems under beauty is ugliness that none deserve to see. This would flow much better if ...
Apr 24, 2014