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Which makes you think... who really is the prologue slayer?

Well... it just eludes the reader, unless they want to look up the breed. Instead of saying the breeds name, I would stick with just describing what the horse looked ...

I don't like the name "Lipizzaner." Otherwise, it seems interesting enough.

Wow... so the lack of the letter "e" wasn't noticable. I'm glad. And Shriek, this story was one of the most difficult stories I've ever written just because of that ...

It reminds me of something me and my friend would co-write, lol.

Yeah. It does have artistic merit because it shows us insight as to who the character of this writer is. Every piece of writing does that. But... I don't know. ...

The actress thing sounds cool. Like... Phantom of the Opera, except without the handsome Gerard Butler. And it sounds like you can have a BLAST with it. Especially if it ...

:shock: This is supposed to be a Christmas story! There is no way I'm going to replace Christmas with Holiday . Eww...

The bad part of this poem is that it's displayed on the main page, whether you like this kind of language or not. :?

Absolutely right, Incan. Now, one of the worst traps a writer can fall into is being too emotional while writing something. Even poetry, which is very emotional by itself, shouldn't ...

This is NOT a good prologue. It sets it up, mind you, but so clumsily that it leaves the reader uninterested. You can explain all this information in the story. ...

The Bible! It's withstood how many millenia and still remains as fresh as it was!

This is neat! But I would like to see more line breaks...

Simplicity is an art. :) Creating an image in the reader's head is the first step in poetry, and strangely enough simple images can convey so much more than long ...

:shock: You stole my idea from FREAK! No, I think it's an awesome revelation. Too often people use "cutesy" stuff when the origins are hardly cutesy. Otherwise, I wouldn't have ...