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Secondly, short stories dont usually have plots, they're not really necessary. *coughs* Whatever you say...

My Love, We lost.

And Nate looked this over... psh!

I love the beginning... it captures you in quickly since it gives you a human aspect of this history lesson. :)

*nods* Quite...

Well... it is a friggin' long sentence...

*cringes* Sam, you have improved SO much...

Lol! I know he'll get a kick of it -- but it makes you nervous too, see? *blushes* And my dad? He's one of the "unseen" politicians who works in ...

My eyes! My eyes!

When I first read this, I thought that you meant you loved the girl because she abused animals! XD With that said, interesting idea. I love the title. I just ...

Don't use &; use and. And.. I know that this is a story about Merlin, but... well... quite honestly, there is no story. It's just a longer-than-usual description. I would ...

Good... um... made me want to write... So... I'll critique this later and write instead, eh? But it reminds me of FREAK! A sci fi that isn't a sci fi! ...

When you begin, we're not sure who the narrator is. As the poem develops, you learn about the narrator, etc. I guess what really bugs me is the lack of ...

Oh! Thanks guys. :) I will edit that part... soon. >

LOL! Of course not. Grammar can be broken and will be broken, but it needs to be skillfully done. ;)