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Haha, I love it. :) The main thing here is you have toooooooooooooons of adverbs, and you use that as an excuse to not use interesting verbs, which is a ...

I have to say... I absolutely adore this poem. XD I mean, I love math and all, don't get me wrong! I learned calculus before I learned how to drive. ...

Ack! Have to point this little typo out: Yes, Freedom is a state of mine

Hi misstoria! :D Hm. This poem is interesting. I find it intriguing that you are using flight as a metaphor both for life and of death. It's an interesting concept! ...

Hey Jasmine! :) The thing about this poem was that it wasn't sure what it wanted to be. So it was very unsure sounding! When I think of innocence, I ...

This kind of reminds me of "Naming of Parts" by Henry Reed, except not nearly as powerful. For one, you kind of stall at the very end and seem to ...

Ooh, interesting. It kind of reminds me of the Song of Songs by Solomon since it's a collection of poems that go back and forth on love and loss and ...

Hi Yurii! So, since the contest is officially closed, I am reviewing the entries that were posted on the literary forums. The thing about this story is that it's not ...

Hi! Just a couple of things... “No kidding. My mother was a dragon and she kinda did that as a part time job before she had me.” The knight said. ...

Hi Kyllorac! Hmm... it seems like you were going for the bad writing without actually putting a story in here. Not sure why you did this, lol. In any case, ...

Ooers, another fairy tale! I adore those. I think you were wrong in your refusal to add more detail... you have an interesting story beginning, but then it kind of ...

Hey Tangent! Did I mention that you were awesome? Because you are! Now, for your poem, I kind of adored the "My sister hasn’t spoken to me" stanza because it ...

Hey Smiley! :D Lovely poem! I like the positive aspects to it and everything... mommies deserve tons of love! :) One thing that you might consider doing is cleaning up ...

Hey Jennya! Thanks for commenting on my poem. :D And thanks for explaining some of the Australian lingo! I wouldn't have known it otherwise, being in America and all. For ...

Hey Mikko! :D It seems more like a summary of what you want to write instead of a story. I would keep this as a summary of what you're going ...