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Hey Becca! A quick question... is there a prompt associated with this essay? I would love to help get you into college, but they can be strict about being on ...

Hey Super Duper! :D Okay, so! Your poem is really, really, really difficult to read. For one, it's full of gimicky bits. For example, the capitalized beginnings of each line ...

Hi Dakota! Okay, I said that I would look at this... and here I am! I like this overall! The ending, in bold was a bit confusing, but I like ...

Hahah! This was so cute. :) I know this sounds pretty insulting, but I love how shallow you made yourself sound. It made it seem like you had gotten over ...

Hi empress! :) Their limbs are knotted, coiled, and sleek. Their voices are : tuba, bassoon, sousaphone. They glow with a dangerous sort of light,

Okay, so, first of all! You're amazing and I love you and your shiny pretty hair. Now that we got that covered... you need to post more than every year ...

Okay! Grammar nitpicks first! I heard dad say that it goes on for miles, but I can’t believe that. Mom walks confidently in front, followed closely by dad and me. ...

YAY! :D Sorry I wasn't here for a bit... I had a short trip with my grandfather and it was fun! But I'm here now! I honestly thought she was ...

Awwww... last one! I'll make this critique a good one, eh? ;) Strangely enough, this is as close to cheerful as I have seen him all day. Why does she ...

Rawr! Back again! :D The brutish man leads the crowd of docile families into the center. This might be me, but the adjectives in this sentence kind of choke away ...

Woo! I TOLD you I would be back, didn't I? Well, I AM. :D “That was years ago. And besides, she’s a convict. I will not have a damn convict ...

ZOMG. I love it. Where is the love button again? He’s 6’2”, and has enough muscle to lift three hundred pounds. I think you should spell it out. Six-foot two-inches... ...

Sorry for being so late! :o Down farther is a mother clung to by two little blond ones and when the mother removes an auburn wig, you know only what ...

Hi sarebear! :D Okay, there are tons of good things about this poem! For one, I love all the concrete description. It's lovely... probably because it's so specific, lol. I ...

Hello Dragongirl! First of all, I love Areida's suggestions above. They will make your poem soooo much better and it'll turn out to be really good, so definitely give those ...