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Hey Stori! I like the perspective, but I have to say that it feels like there is something missing. It seems too short. Right now, we don't really see a ...

OMG. Why is this in fantasy and not in nonfiction?! This is essentially the story of my life! :D Anyway, you should totally write more of this. Mostly because it's ...

Hey Ignatius! I like the feel of your poem and the poem's subject. What can I say? Predatory cats in dreams make me happy. Mostly for me, it's tigers, but ...

Hi Deathcurrent! :D Okay, so you have an interesting premise here! One thing that particularly tickled my fancy was the idea of the boyfriend being stuck in her head. Ouch! ...

Hey FishStark! Love the twist at the end. :) Okay! So this story has a fairly classical feel to it, where you mostly describe things and don't actually show them. ...

Hi Milkandcookies! You need to research the chain of events, because some things are not factually correct, and for those of us who remember this time quite vividly, the lack ...

Guh, I don't know how to cut this down! But I have to say, as someone who graduated with a Bachelor's of Science, I have to say that I loved ...

Sachi! I loooooooove you! And I love Karina, even though Karina is not Karina because there was no way in hell I would be as sensitive as her about those ...

Oh wow... I love how bouncy and upbeat this poem is, Daisuki. I sometimes bug people and say, "You have to write poems in your voice, but you've definitely done ...

I'm just going to comment in red or green, okay? :) * “I’m standing in front of a bartender in a wedding dress and yet, that isn’t the craziest thing ...

Hi katngo! :D You said you wanted this review so… well… here I am! First of all, I have to comment on the formatting… it’s very weird. I am not ...

Hey, Priceless! Okay, so you asked for this to be reviewed, so here I am! Now, as far as this piece goes, it seems… partly realistic and partly not? I ...

Hahah! I wouldn't quite call this poem innocent, actually. For one, the actual story between Jack and Jill has to do with the French revolution and the beheadings of the ...

Hey Benway! Okay, so I loved your poem. It kind of reminds me of "This Is Just To Say" by William Carlos Williams in its apparent simplicity in a common ...

Hi Hayden! I know this is going to sound awful, but I would really like to see this piece expanded on a bit. For example, as it is, there is ...