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Eek, you're in the middle of editing? Hopefully, my comments won't be totally worthless then! First, the horse makes me sad. I wish no horses were treated like this, ever. ...

Hi! Do you happen to like Nine Inch Nails, or am I totally off the mark? Anyway! For this poem, I think you can make this much cooler if you ...

This might just be me, but while I love bare dialogue, this seems to be wanting to be fleshed out. Especially if you continue it! Also, fleshing it out and ...

Hi! I actually think this would serve as a nonfiction story than a poem. Right now, this is a little more than a rant that is in poetic form. Which ...

Hi! You linked this to me, so I'd figure I would comment. I didn't read the rest because you just linked me this. But, I think I have a rough ...

Hey Qara! :) For this poem... one of the things that struck me was that all these people seemed to do was they looked at each other and then they ...

Locked. Plagiarized.

Locked. Plagiarized.

I don't know. This looks more like a creed than an actual poem. I mean, we (my church and I) recite the Nicene Creed every time we go to church, ...

Hey TinyDancer! :) This piece seems a little bit too short, and I think you can definitely expand on some of the scenes in here! In this story, you have ...

I don't get it... it seems like the writer is very much in love, but she is hindered by her own insecurities. Okay, fine. Honestly, I probably wouldn't be able ...

Oh. My. Goodness. This is quite possibly the cutest thing I have ever read. I mean, I love carrot cake to the point where my nickname is Carrot Cake. So, ...

Ew. A cigarette should never be taken as a penis (or penis substitute), ever. For one, it's rather smelly. For another, it's too small. Don't forget the whole burning vaginal ...

Hey kid! I like the first part of this story, but the first part and the second part seemed oddly detached from each other. She is pretty... emotionless about his ...

Hey lonewolf! I figured I would take a look at your story. :) Anyway, your story is really hard to read because of the grammar. You use periods sparingly, your ...