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Re: The Nameless
YAY! I'm working on a story very much like this, so let's see if I can help you... The way this critique will be, just to be different, very fragmented. ...
Apr 3, 2005 -
Re: Pickles
For some weird reason, I liked this. Maybe because it wasn't so overwhelmed with angst like the other poems I've read. Even so, I think the last line is a ...
Apr 2, 2005 -
Re: Cutting Edge
It's not compatable; it's compatible. Change that. :P Otherwise, I loved it. My dad got one of those PDAs and it was telling it the directions to our hotel on ...
Apr 2, 2005 -
Re: Pale Moon, Chapter 1: Afina Senin
I'm not into the vampire stuff much, so I won't comment on the story too much. I found it rather cliched, but promising for an 11 year old. When I ...
Apr 2, 2005 -
Re: surreality (a short story) (Over 13) /P
You did something very very bad. You switched tenses. Now what does this mean? Observe: "Grant turned toward the window and looked out." "But I stop, and our faces are ...
Apr 2, 2005