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First of all, since this is a writing site, we don't allow chatspeak. Otherwise, the mods go absolutely crazy. ^__^ Now! The story! The biggest thing that needs to be ...

No! Not English grammar! It's my worst subject! *dies* Um... yeah. Two lines didn't quite fit the rhyming scheme of things: Boys of all ages would come and claim, That ...

This is the only line that sounds awkward: "I realize that any attempts to create beauty" I think the guilty one is the word "that." It sounds too coarse for ...

Quick critique! In the title, the word "sentence" is spelled wrong. Change it. ‘Miss Emily Taylor is sentenced to 7 years transportation to Australia for stealing the following items: 1 ...

Hmm... I had an experience like that in California. It's not exclusive to where you live. As far as the story? You were much too repetitive. Now, I know that ...

Face it -- the better a work is, the less people will comment on it. ;) I liked it in a strange way. I thought it was very abstract, and ...

SAM! YOU SHOULD KNOW BETTER! Gr..... You change from past tense to present! *kills* Yeah... usually I wouldn't be so uptight about it but - gah! You're one of the ...

As you probably know, I like pigs. A lot. When I was in second grade, I was quite obsessive over them and said that they were the best species in ...

Okay! Maybe not a couple of days. ;) The next thing, besides spelling, would be grammar. Many writers would rather have the critiquer comment on the aspects of the story ...

Aw man! You mean I can't rip this apart, my great hooves shredding pieces of this reflection everywhere? You're no fun! I'll tell you what -- I tear this apart ...

I wrote this in 2003 for something. I also have a couple of diary entries, which I'll probably post on here, just for record's sake. 2003 Memories... Actually I didn't ...

What a fabo name for a pencil! My mom teases me because I'm attatched to my pencils. Sometimes she'll ask me if they have names. Maybe I should name one ...

Prologue: The End. OMG! THE SHORTEST STORY! AWESOME! Er... yeah. Get rid of the army talk. It just doesn't fit. Gryphons are so friggin' awesome that they don't need weapons. ...

The whole poem seems rushed and forced. I do like one line, "my friend, where are you going?" because it slows down the piece. It is simply stated and it ...

Hopefully it will be recorded! We have no guitar, so most likely Grif will be singing the guitar line, unless Beet wants to come over with her guitar. XD Yeah. ...