Snoink

Hello! Er... I haven't critiqued in a while, so hopefully this isn't too harsh or too nice. I forgot how to write these things! Anyway, whatever it is, I hope ...

Wait. So she was a spy? Dude. Then why was she so clumsy? Why was she infatuated with this guy? I mean, from "Burn Notice," often spies would consider people ...

This is a truly brilliant poem. The quest; it begins and I scurry around, my brethren with me, all searching for something to eat; fast, fast, fast as can be, ...

Hello and welcome to YWS! I love overdramatic poetry, so this might just be me, but the more you can milk it, the happier I am. You've already done a ...

Don't put this as a poem. It would be much better as dialogue. In fact, if there's really no compelling reason why this should be a poem (like... if the ...

Hello and welcome to YWS! This is very much the same as the rest of your work, and that's bad. You should try a little variety, just because everybody needs ...

Hi! I am going to be mean and everything, but I wasn't really emotionally affected by that at all. ^_^ It was much too abstract! It's a lot of, "you ...

This... isn't a good story. First of all, the initial conflict is that she's walking somewhere with two white roses. Um... so what? This isn't a good catch. If it's ...

Hello! I haven't seen you around very much, even though it looks like you've been fairly active, so first of all, welcome to YWS! :D I am a somewhat harder ...

Hello! First off, I want to quote the first page of a rather famous book called "A Grief Observed" by C.S. Lewis. He did the Narnia series, but this is ...

To be honest, I didn't read these books. But not because I didn't try! I hated them and put them down. Hopefully they'll stay down... "Interstellar Pig" by William Sleator ...

Your dialogue grammar is wrong -- listen to JFW. ;) I just wanted to give a quick comment: it seems like you're rushing a lot through these events. And that's ...

This seems to want to be an inspirational message, but it doesn't really work with me. I'm used to reading these inspirational stories which are that--stories of people succeeding. It's ...

Hello! You totally reviewed my poem, so I guess it's only fair for me to do the same! :D I'm one of the tougher critics to please on YWS, so ...

Sci fi??? Robots??? I'm soooo totally in. Anyway, I loved the story. You're quite a talented writer, even though you talk yourself down at every possible opportunity . You're quite ...